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Re: Looking for honest feedback on this poem - October 11th 2012, 09:09 AM
Hey there, mate!
This is excellant! The writing structure is brilliant, and I can sense emotion in this you have talent!

Jay.
P.S I live up the coast from Sydney good to see people from the NSW area around
Feel free to PM/VM me anytime if you'd like some constructive critiscm for I write short stories, novels and poems.

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