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Originally Posted by Oneirophobia

"I woke up to the sounds of my favourite song and the sights and smells of what used to be last night. Now the morning after. David Guetta and Usher Raymond soothing a battered head. What even happened last night? The moment I got up I immediately realised what happened. The rusty, vintage alarm clock (which didn’t work by the way) said 2PM January 1, 2012. I walked towards the bathroom, struggling to keep my feet and looked at my “new self” in the mirror. There was a note on the mirror too:

I really like this beginning! Gives a nice beginning to it all. I'm going to advise you to maybe find a way to start this showing rather than telling. For example, "the sights and smells of what used to be last night" is very poetic, but you can make it shine a bit more! Why not have it (this is an example, use it to what applies better to your story "the sights of green-tinted beer bottles and the smell of bad choices; the remnants of last night." It gives it a stronger image that brings the story together.

Originally Posted by Oneirophobia

A smirk of amusement only lasted a matter of seconds before I realised it wasn't a joke. I lifted my shirt and saw the unthinkable. Green with shades of very dark blue a man was smiling at me. At least 8 inches tall with a massive grey beard and a hat on his hand, he bore the same smirk I had on a matter of seconds ago. Inhabited on my chest was an Irish Leprechaun who seeked refuge on my body in a moment of blind drunkenness, only one part of the night that was. I was horrified.

LOVE THIS! Description is great!

The rest of it, I would make it a big clearer, but I like the verbal explanations for what is going on, it makes the story very mysterious and fun to read! But you may want to clarify a bit, I had to read it a few times to get the story. And is this the end? I think an expansion would be great, there can be a lot more of symbols and meanings behind this story if you decide to expand it.

Good luck!