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Doing fine by design.
 Jeez, get a life!
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Re: The day time stood still. -
October 4th 2016, 12:21 AM
This is a really interesting beginning, and you've done a great job building up the sense of mystery. The only thing I'll mention is that when you write minuets you probably mean minutes; the misspellings kind of pulled me out of the story a bit , but otherwise the atmosphere is really good. I hope to see the next part up soon. 
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