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				Re: another cheesy poem -_- - 
            
          
		
		
				
		
				September 16th 2013, 08:59 PM
			
			
			
		 
               
 
Yeah, everyone is critical when it comes to their work because they know all of the places where things COULD be worded better.
 I personally think it's not bad at all, maybe needs some accenting. But I guess it's in the style.
  
            
               
 I moved back while 
my head was turned.
 
Upside down 
closer to the end.
 
Afraid of the dark 
within future times.
 
I'm drowning there, 
my final chase.
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