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Soda_Voxel

August 28th 2022 07:03 PM

Some kind of heaven

Suspended in mid-air
At 500 miles per hour
Trapped in the never space.
Early risers
A different world, one without sleep
Bathed in black and filtered with monochrome
Seperate world, it wakes
Papers and cards and bags and footsteps
Footsteps, footsteps, footsteps
Push past, bend and break against
Hold it all inside
A black diamond mask, which no light pierces
Yet still splintered on the inside
Rise from the ground
Like phoenix from ashes
Yet no flame is sparked
I am still ashes
Falling down
Floating upward
Hanging in the unknown
Blue sea blue sky blue heart
As my stomach drops
I start to feel
Maybe I'll finally touch
Some kind of Heaven

¯|_(ツ)_|¯

August 28th 2022 07:42 PM

Re: Some kind of heaven

The description in this is awesome! I like how you ended it too.

DeletedAccount81

August 29th 2022 12:10 PM

Re: Some kind of heaven

Oh, wow, I really liked this one! I liked the description you used and the way you ended it.

Celyn

August 30th 2022 01:48 PM

Re: Some kind of heaven

I love your writing and especially the phrase 'Trapped in the never space'. Thank you for sharing with us :)

Mindfulness.

September 8th 2022 10:41 AM

Re: Some kind of heaven

Wow, the imagery that you wrote in this piece is wonderful.

Astro04

September 8th 2022 01:07 PM

Re: Some kind of heaven

Literally some kind of heaven. Like it!

Arabesque- golfing girl.

September 8th 2022 02:28 PM

Re: Some kind of heaven

I enjoyed reading this and you did a wonderful job writing this poem. Thank you so much sharing this with us. :hug:

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