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Post Some kind of heaven - August 28th 2022, 08:03 PM

Suspended in mid-air
At 500 miles per hour
Trapped in the never space.
Early risers
A different world, one without sleep
Bathed in black and filtered with monochrome
Seperate world, it wakes
Papers and cards and bags and footsteps
Footsteps, footsteps, footsteps
Push past, bend and break against
Hold it all inside
A black diamond mask, which no light pierces
Yet still splintered on the inside
Rise from the ground
Like phoenix from ashes
Yet no flame is sparked
I am still ashes
Falling down
Floating upward
Hanging in the unknown
Blue sea blue sky blue heart
As my stomach drops
I start to feel
Maybe I'll finally touch
Some kind of Heaven


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Re: Some kind of heaven - August 28th 2022, 08:42 PM

The description in this is awesome! I like how you ended it too.


Do you ever get a little bit tired of life
Like you're not really happy but you don't wanna die
Like you're hanging by a thread but you gotta survive
'Cause you gotta survive
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Re: Some kind of heaven - August 29th 2022, 01:10 PM

Oh, wow, I really liked this one! I liked the description you used and the way you ended it.
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Re: Some kind of heaven - August 30th 2022, 02:48 PM

I love your writing and especially the phrase 'Trapped in the never space'. Thank you for sharing with us


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Re: Some kind of heaven - September 8th 2022, 11:41 AM

Wow, the imagery that you wrote in this piece is wonderful.


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Re: Some kind of heaven - September 8th 2022, 02:07 PM

Literally some kind of heaven. Like it!
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Re: Some kind of heaven - September 8th 2022, 03:28 PM

I enjoyed reading this and you did a wonderful job writing this poem. Thank you so much sharing this with us.


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It’s the rhythm
of your life.

It’s the expression
in time and movement,

in happiness, joy, sadness and envy.
-Jacques d’Ambroise''
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