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The Pretenders (My Recovery Poem)
I went down to the county hospital
And checked myself in Spend six of my weeks there Far from my good-timing friends Things just went from bad to worse But I don't know when The only thing I know for sure Is I ain't going back again They took me down to hall D After stripping off my clothes Put me in a monkey suit And threw me in the throes Like a rat in a maze A cow in the herd Or a sparrow with a broken wing Now I know the reason why A caged bird has to sing Cause I'm just a pretender In the McLean Psychiatric Hospital Should have listened to my mama And quit my life of sin Before I went backsliding once again This bed is hard and the room is cold And my cellmate's got a cough She takes her meds and sleeps all day Got two more weeks til she's done She said she beat her boyfriend up While high on crack cocaine And now she sits and watches Her life go down the drain Cause she's just a pretender In the McLean Psychiatric Hospital She should have listened to her mama And quit her life of sin Before she went backsliding yet again They walked us into some other room There they tried to make us eat Red-dyed gravy, cardboard bread And something that looked like meat One tough girl from Hall C Picked a fight with the man at the desk Mighty soon we were sent back to our rooms And I bet you know the rest Cause we're all just pretending In the McLean Psychiatric Hospital We should have listened to the good Lord Maybe quit our life of sin Before we all went backsliding once again Before we all went backsliding yet again Thanks for reading. And I just got Tumblr: waltzwithsin |
Re: The Pretenders (My Recovery Poem)
First of all, I moved this to self-expression, because I think you will get more responses.
This is a really good poem and very well written. I really like how you repeated a verse but changed it a little. Great job and don't stop writing. |
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I enjoyed this. I liked the repeated stanza too. I could relate to parts of it and agree that it's well written.
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I really liked reading this. Very descriptive and well written.
Love this part: Quote:
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I really liked this poem, thank you for sharing!
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This is amazing! I really love how you started it.
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Yes :) and thanks everyone for the comments |
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I enjoyed this! Great job :)
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Cool, just gorgeous. Keep up the good work
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I really like how you repeated some of the sections over and over, but changed the words around just a slight bit each time. Well done, don't stop writing! :)
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