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WhisperingSilence

August 3rd 2017 09:30 AM

hello are you there?

Hello are you there?
Can you hear me?
Can you see me?
I'm walking on a tightrope,
Are you there?
Ready and waiting to catch me when I fall?
Can you see me?
Can you hear me?
Hello are you there?
I'm scared and alone,
I need someone,
I'm lost and empty,
Are you there?
Hello are you there?

hocus pocus

August 3rd 2017 01:49 PM

Re: hello are you there?

This was a nice read, I can feel the emotion here. Thank you for sharing.

¯|_(ツ)_|¯

August 4th 2017 01:33 AM

Re: hello are you there?

I like how you asked questions in this.

DeletedAccount69

August 5th 2017 10:40 PM

Re: hello are you there?

I liked the questions you asked. I felt it had a lot of emotion in it. :)

Storyteller.

August 6th 2017 01:26 AM

Re: hello are you there?

I really like the repetition of the questions in this one. Thanks for sharing!

Arabesque- golfing girl.

August 6th 2017 07:16 PM

Re: hello are you there?

This was nice. I liked it. Hugs.

Kintsukuroi.

August 7th 2017 06:09 AM

Re: hello are you there?

I thought the way this was written was interesting because I liked how you used questions! Thanks for sharing. ^.^

matthewmatters

August 8th 2017 12:20 PM

Re: hello are you there?

the repeated lines at different points were a great idea

Everglow.

August 13th 2017 09:27 PM

Re: hello are you there?

The emotion in this was really strong. When I read it, it was almost like some of the repetitions were echoes, which seemed to reflect the loneliness which I think was being put across. It's a really well written poem.

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