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The Last Message (poem) - November 16th 2016, 01:14 AM

Hello?
You there?
I'm lost again
Hello?
You there?
I'm all alone
Hello?
You there?
Please save me
Hello?
You there?
I'm actually scared
Hello?
You there?
I am sorry
Hello?
You there?
Okay, I'll go
Good-bye!
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Re: The Last Message (poem) - November 17th 2016, 12:52 PM

The repetition of "Hello? You there?" is definitely my favorite part of this. Hope to see more from you soon!

If clarity's in death, then why won't this die?
Years of tearing down our banners, you and I
Living for the thrill of hitting you where it hurts
Give me back my girlhood, it was mine first

The axe forgets, but the tree remembers

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Re: The Last Message (poem) - November 20th 2016, 12:32 AM

I also like the repetition.

Do you ever get a little bit tired of life
Like you're not really happy but you don't wanna die
Like you're hanging by a thread but you gotta survive
'Cause you gotta survive

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Re: The Last Message (poem) - November 23rd 2016, 05:54 AM

As the others have said, the repetition was really good, and the emotion behind the piece was evident. I hope you decide to post some more of your work again sometime, I'd love to see it.

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