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WhisperingSilence

September 11th 2016 09:25 PM

lights

the lights are on,
nobodys home,
you're all alone,
the lights are on,
the worlds passing you by,
no one to hear your cry,
you're all alone,
the lights are on,
your minds alive,
your hearts dead,
emotions running wild,
the lights are on
no-bodys home,
you're all alone.

NeuroBeautiful

September 11th 2016 10:46 PM

Re: lights

I really liked this! The repetition of the light and being alone go well together.

Storyteller.

September 12th 2016 01:10 AM

Re: lights

Like the user above me said, the repetition is really effective, and the whole piece is kind of hauntingly sad. Thanks for sharing, and I hope you're okay. :hug:

¯|_(ツ)_|¯

September 12th 2016 04:38 PM

Re: lights

I also agree about the repetition. :D

.Brittany.

September 12th 2016 05:48 PM

Re: lights

Wow that was really good! I love it :)

Keep up the good work! I look forward to reading more from you.

Elision

September 12th 2016 07:10 PM

Re: lights

The repetition is super effective. The contrast is really beautiful, well done!

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