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lights - September 11th 2016, 10:25 PM

the lights are on,
nobodys home,
you're all alone,
the lights are on,
the worlds passing you by,
no one to hear your cry,
you're all alone,
the lights are on,
your minds alive,
your hearts dead,
emotions running wild,
the lights are on
no-bodys home,
you're all alone.


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Re: lights - September 11th 2016, 11:46 PM

I really liked this! The repetition of the light and being alone go well together.
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Re: lights - September 12th 2016, 02:10 AM

Like the user above me said, the repetition is really effective, and the whole piece is kind of hauntingly sad. Thanks for sharing, and I hope you're okay.


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Re: lights - September 12th 2016, 05:38 PM

I also agree about the repetition.


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Re: lights - September 12th 2016, 06:48 PM

Wow that was really good! I love it

Keep up the good work! I look forward to reading more from you.



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Re: lights - September 12th 2016, 08:10 PM

The repetition is super effective. The contrast is really beautiful, well done!


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