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WhisperingSilence June 10th 2016 10:42 AM

Summer
 
A child wanders stick in hand,
Smiling wandering past the lake,
Not a care in the world,
Inquistive.
Thats summer
A girl sits on the bench watching,
Smiling at his innocence,
Lost and alone,
Depressed.
Thats summer.
The birds chirp and chatter,
The child smiles,
Stick in hand,
Running through the grass,
Happy.
Thats summer.
Blade in her hand,
Thoughts in the lake,
Alone.
That's summer.

perfectlyfalling June 10th 2016 08:13 PM

Re: Summer
 
Aw Lydia this is really good. I'm sorry that its sad. :( I hope you feel better soon.

NeuroBeautiful June 11th 2016 03:10 AM

Re: Summer
 
I like the imagery here and how it creates tension, how you present summer as fun but also has a dark side.

¯|_(ツ)_|¯ June 12th 2016 05:51 PM

Re: Summer
 
I like the repetition of "that's summer," and like Maizel I also like how you show summer as fun but also having a dark side.


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