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Untitled Poem
Just something I randomly came up with. Feels kind of out of place with all these evocative and meaningful poems...
I saw the stars again appear off in the distance far from here Away from smoke and fog and dust away from sweat and steel and rust Where the air is pure and life untamed where fecund lands by no-one claimed I saw the dawn once more arise rose-red and without disguise The gloam as well was unmarred, pure no more black sable smog to endure But I ought not to tell a single soul of this Eden, this redemption whole For what despoils, what chaos wrought by masses with good intentions thought I saw the stars fade once more from the sky the sun and moon both sputtered and died no more would there be lavender dawn or majestic dusk, orange and tawn. I wish I could change what was long said and done to bring back the moon and unveil the sun But too late was my judgement made and now Eden slips to the grave. |
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It's not out of place at all, it fits in well! Anything fits in here. :hug: I think you did a fantastic job with this and I hope to see more of your work soon!
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This definitely isn't out of place! It is beautifully written.
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Like the others said, this definitely belongs here! I really liked the piece. It felt sophisticated and emotional, and the imagery was beautiful, helped along by some absolutely fantastic word choice. Thank you so much for sharing it, and I really hope you decide to share more of your work soon.
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I love this a lot especially the first and second stanzas! I hope you post more here. :)
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