Wishing On Planes (poem)

[Phantom_Girl]

Hi people! So, I had this random idea for a poem for a long time now, and I finally got around to writing it. I'm thinking of submitting it to my schools annual book of student written work, but I'm not sure if it's good enough, or I should elaborate more. What do you guys think?
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Wishing On Planes:

I see my dreams before my eyes,
When I see a star up in the sky.
I close my eyes and make a wish
As I start to mumble this:

Star light, star bright,
First star I see tonight,
I wish I may, I wish I might,
Have this wish I wish tonight.

I wish and wish as hard as I can,
And I wish, and wish, and wish again.
Just as I start to go insane,
I open my eyes to find it’s a plane.

The glowing light I thought was a star
Has flown away and traveled far.
I was ticked, deceived and fooled.
My hopes and dreams were overruled.

This seems to happen way too often.
And soon my dreams are all forgotten.
So I wish upon another plane,
Just to see if I can wish again.
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Thoughts? What I'm trying to say is: I am a dreamer, and have dreams I really want to come true. Whenever I see a "star" in the sky, I wish on it. But sometimes, it turns out to be a plane, and my dreams just fly away and have no hope of ever coming true. But I still wish and hope just for the sake of doing it, even though I have no more hope.

[better-than-ecstasy]

THIS IS FANTASTIC! Honestly, I love the whole idea behind it. Even though you know what the truth is a great majority of the time, you still dream. That's really amazing. I really hope people learn from this poem and to never give up. There is nothing ever wrong with wishing.

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I think you totally should submit this!

[hocus pocus]

I like the message behind this. Definitely submit it! And keep us updated, I'm interested to know how it goes.

The message is fantastic and the words flow beautifully. I definitely think you should submit it.

[stelles]

Submit it! I love the idea, and the way you wrote it.

I loved this and I could relate to what you wrote on a certain level. Thank you for sharing.

[Raggedy Man, Goodnight!]

I really like this, you are a great writer :-)