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Wishing On Planes (poem) -
March 11th 2014, 02:33 AM
Hi people! So, I had this random idea for a poem for a long time now, and I finally got around to writing it. I'm thinking of submitting it to my schools annual book of student written work, but I'm not sure if it's good enough, or I should elaborate more. What do you guys think?
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Wishing On Planes:
I see my dreams before my eyes,
When I see a star up in the sky.
I close my eyes and make a wish
As I start to mumble this:
Star light, star bright,
First star I see tonight,
I wish I may, I wish I might,
Have this wish I wish tonight.
I wish and wish as hard as I can,
And I wish, and wish, and wish again.
Just as I start to go insane,
I open my eyes to find it’s a plane.
The glowing light I thought was a star
Has flown away and traveled far.
I was ticked, deceived and fooled.
My hopes and dreams were overruled.
This seems to happen way too often.
And soon my dreams are all forgotten.
So I wish upon another plane,
Just to see if I can wish again.
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Thoughts? What I'm trying to say is: I am a dreamer, and have dreams I really want to come true. Whenever I see a "star" in the sky, I wish on it. But sometimes, it turns out to be a plane, and my dreams just fly away and have no hope of ever coming true. But I still wish and hope just for the sake of doing it, even though I have no more hope.
Savvy?
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Re: Wishing On Planes (poem) -
March 11th 2014, 03:18 AM
THIS IS FANTASTIC! Honestly, I love the whole idea behind it. Even though you know what the truth is a great majority of the time, you still dream. That's really amazing. I really hope people learn from this poem and to never give up. There is nothing ever wrong with wishing.
~I was always scared of everything, even the carousel.~
~Don't worry about me. I'm sort of feeling fine, but by tomorrow, I'll be back on my feet again.~
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March 11th 2014, 03:44 AM
I think you totally should submit this! 
Do you ever get a little bit tired of life
Like you're not really happy but you don't wanna die
Like you're hanging by a thread but you gotta survive
'Cause you gotta survive
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March 11th 2014, 05:04 AM
I like the message behind this.  Definitely submit it! And keep us updated, I'm interested to know how it goes.
If clarity's in death, then why won't this die?
Years of tearing down our banners, you and I
Living for the thrill of hitting you where it hurts
Give me back my girlhood, it was mine first
The axe forgets, but the tree remembers
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Re: Wishing On Planes (poem) -
March 12th 2014, 10:50 PM
The message is fantastic and the words flow beautifully. I definitely think you should submit it.
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Re: Wishing On Planes (poem) -
March 12th 2014, 10:58 PM
Submit it! I love the idea, and the way you wrote it.
Be yourself, because those who matter don't mind and those who mind don't matter.
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Re: Wishing On Planes (poem) -
March 14th 2014, 02:50 AM
I loved this and I could relate to what you wrote on a certain level. Thank you for sharing.
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March 14th 2014, 03:09 AM
I really like this, you are a great writer :-)
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