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Lil'OrphanAnnie

July 20th 2013 05:09 PM

first poem in a while

scared to leave the house
hiding like a little mouse
cant answer the phone
I don't think anybody is home
Running through my head
thoughts of how I will be dead
if I stay too far away
but I don't want to stay
I want to be free
and go out and play
please tell me!
will I ever get my day?

its been quite a few months that I have written anything. so any comments are appreciated. thank you very much :)

¯|_(ツ)_|¯

July 20th 2013 05:15 PM

Re: first poem in a while

I like how you ended it with a question. :)

coolkid98

July 20th 2013 08:03 PM

Re: first poem in a while

This is a great poem, I agree with dez, its an awesome ending :)

DeletedAccount69

July 21st 2013 08:22 PM

Re: first poem in a while

I liked this as well. And, the ending was pretty good. I like when poems end with questions because it leaves you with something to think about. :)

DeletedAccount17

August 2nd 2013 10:29 PM

Re: first poem in a while

Short, but good. :)

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