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PrimadonnaQueen March 2nd 2013 06:37 PM
My first poem, "fortune and fame"
 
My friend Taylor inspired me to start writing poetry.
Her poetry is so honest and beautiful.
This is the first poem I have ever written, (I usually write songs)
please give me feedback, but don't be too harsh lol :)
This poem is entitled "fortune and fame", and is about the evil side of the music industry, and what people do for fame and money.
It is very personal. It is also about the fear of fame, religion, and how its a shame you can't have both.
Its really short.

I want to live out my fantasies,
I want to live my wildest dreams,
but you must sign the contract with blood not ink,
yes fame is different from what people think.

you look at Katy and think you know,
but shes controlled, programmed to be on a show,
Like Gaga, Rihanna, Marshall finally broke free,
not afraid to say how he really feels.

I know i'll burn in hell if I sign,
so when the devil comes, I must decline,
I could change my every way, meet an early grave,
but its really not worth it for fortune and fame.

hedgehog444 March 2nd 2013 07:26 PM
Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame"
 
It's a good poem let's hope for more off you.. xxx

PrimadonnaQueen March 2nd 2013 07:38 PM
Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame"
 
aww thank you Harry xxx

¯|_(ツ)_|¯ March 2nd 2013 11:06 PM
Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame"
 
I totally agree! I like the references you used. :)

PrimadonnaQueen March 2nd 2013 11:17 PM
Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame"
 
thank you!

oldaccount March 3rd 2013 01:49 AM
Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame"
 
I like this a lot! :) it's great!

mindflower March 3rd 2013 03:25 PM
Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame"
 
YAY I INSPIRED! :D :hug:
This is really great Mimi, I hope you keep writing seriously! And I can't agree with you more, I'm big in music and this is just brilliant :)

PrimadonnaQueen March 3rd 2013 05:06 PM
Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame"
 
Thanks bubbles and Tay x sorry its so short

Evanescent March 3rd 2013 05:11 PM
Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame"
 
I really like this, I think it's great and I love how you used other artists to make your point.

PrimadonnaQueen March 3rd 2013 06:38 PM
Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame"
 
Thank you Nicole :)

DeletedAccount17 March 3rd 2013 11:34 PM
Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame"
 
I like this a lot! :)

LadyPoeticJustcice March 7th 2013 06:27 PM
Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame"
 
Depending on how poetry is viewed it is similar to songwriting. However, for this being your first poem I believe you really mastered the skill by capturing your raw emotion on the negative aspects of the music industry. I love the use balanced use of repetition. You used just enough for the rhyme scheme to stick in your head and without sugar coding what you wanted to say. This poem is beautiful because it speaks the truth. *sorry the response is so long*

Lil sis March 7th 2013 07:30 PM
Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame"
 
I like it alot 0_0 its EPIC


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