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My first poem, "fortune and fame" -
March 2nd 2013, 07:37 PM
My friend Taylor inspired me to start writing poetry.
Her poetry is so honest and beautiful.
This is the first poem I have ever written, (I usually write songs)
please give me feedback, but don't be too harsh lol 
This poem is entitled "fortune and fame", and is about the evil side of the music industry, and what people do for fame and money.
It is very personal. It is also about the fear of fame, religion, and how its a shame you can't have both.
Its really short.
I want to live out my fantasies,
I want to live my wildest dreams,
but you must sign the contract with blood not ink,
yes fame is different from what people think.
you look at Katy and think you know,
but shes controlled, programmed to be on a show,
Like Gaga, Rihanna, Marshall finally broke free,
not afraid to say how he really feels.
I know i'll burn in hell if I sign,
so when the devil comes, I must decline,
I could change my every way, meet an early grave,
but its really not worth it for fortune and fame.
.....“You believe lies so you eventually learn to trust no one but yourself.”.....
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March 2nd 2013, 08:26 PM
It's a good poem let's hope for more off you.. xxx
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Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame" -
March 2nd 2013, 08:38 PM
aww thank you Harry xxx
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Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame" -
March 3rd 2013, 12:06 AM
I totally agree! I like the references you used.
Do you ever get a little bit tired of life
Like you're not really happy but you don't wanna die
Like you're hanging by a thread but you gotta survive
'Cause you gotta survive
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Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame" -
March 3rd 2013, 12:17 AM
thank you!
.....“You believe lies so you eventually learn to trust no one but yourself.”.....
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Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame" -
March 3rd 2013, 02:49 AM
I like this a lot! it's great!
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March 3rd 2013, 04:25 PM
YAY I INSPIRED!  
This is really great Mimi, I hope you keep writing seriously! And I can't agree with you more, I'm big in music and this is just brilliant
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Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame" -
March 3rd 2013, 06:06 PM
Thanks bubbles and Tay x sorry its so short
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Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame" -
March 3rd 2013, 06:11 PM
I really like this, I think it's great and I love how you used other artists to make your point.
"Shoot for the moon, even if you miss you'll land among the stars."
"For those who don't care, for those who can't see, never give up, always thrive to be free."
Smile, you are beautiful www.operationbeautiful.com
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Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame" -
March 3rd 2013, 07:38 PM
Thank you Nicole
.....“You believe lies so you eventually learn to trust no one but yourself.”.....
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March 4th 2013, 12:34 AM
I like this a lot!
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Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame" -
March 7th 2013, 07:27 PM
Depending on how poetry is viewed it is similar to songwriting. However, for this being your first poem I believe you really mastered the skill by capturing your raw emotion on the negative aspects of the music industry. I love the use balanced use of repetition. You used just enough for the rhyme scheme to stick in your head and without sugar coding what you wanted to say. This poem is beautiful because it speaks the truth. *sorry the response is so long*
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Re: My first poem, "fortune and fame" -
March 7th 2013, 08:30 PM
I like it alot 0_0 its EPIC
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