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Butterflyer

November 18th 2012 05:15 AM

Untitled Poem

I wrote this a while ago but had nobody to show it to :unsure: Let me know what you think and if you have any ideas for a title... :)

Life injected,
Life withdrawn.
Battered and dirty
on the sleeve, life is worn.

Half in, half out,
some people stand.
Bloodied knife and
heart in hand.

Stab it open,
feel the pain.
Forced emotion.
Severed strain.

It still beats strong
like a tribal drum
Unseen masks
hide souls, now numb.

Validity

November 18th 2012 05:29 AM

Re: Untitled Poem

Wow. I love this. You could call it Life? Or something simple like that?

Jay.

Butterflyer

November 18th 2012 08:15 AM

Re: Untitled Poem

Thank you :) Yeah that's a good idea, thanks!

Tigereyes

November 18th 2012 12:48 PM

Re: Untitled Poem

I like this! Good job

¯|_(ツ)_|¯

November 19th 2012 10:31 AM

Re: Untitled Poem

This is really awesome! I like it.

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