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So I wrote a poem type thing at like 4am last night
It's probably really bad but yeah can you tell me what you think?
1 cut 2 cuts 3 cuts 4, Watch the blood drip on the floor. 5 cuts 6 cuts 7 cuts 8, Try to keep your vision straight. 9 cuts 10 cuts 11 cuts 12, further into her mind we will delve. 12 cuts 11 cuts 10 cuts 9, Try to cut a nice straight line. 8 cuts 7 cuts 6 cuts 5, She doesn't want to be alive. 4 cuts 3 cuts 2 cuts 1, Now her pulse just sits at none. |
Re: So I wrote a poem type thing at like 4am last night
It is pretty good. Great flow to it :) keep it up.
Jay. |
Re: So I wrote a poem type thing at like 4am last night
I like the repetative rhythm with the numbers.
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Re: So I wrote a poem type thing at like 4am last night
I like it too. I agree with Total Light Storm.
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Re: So I wrote a poem type thing at like 4am last night
I like this a lot! It's brilliant! :)
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Re: So I wrote a poem type thing at like 4am last night
I like how you counted up AND down, and the repativeness and rhyme to it. :)
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Re: So I wrote a poem type thing at like 4am last night
ahh thank you :)
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Re: So I wrote a poem type thing at like 4am last night
I'll have to mirror what everyone else said, I liked the use of the numbers and the pattern, awesome job! The last bit was my favourite.
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Re: So I wrote a poem type thing at like 4am last night
thank you :)
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