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Let me tell you a story.. (Poem) - September 9th 2012, 04:11 AM

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(Okay, I swear, last one for the night )

Let me tell you about a demon.
It's scarier than the Wolf in Little Red.
He strikes when you least expect.
His name is Ed.

Ed is quiet man,
with slow, strong actions.
He'll fill your head with deception.
Leaving your heart without protection.

He'll show you all of your flaws,
even if there aren't many there.
He'll destroy your life without a care.
And no, he does not play fair.

By the time that help arrives,
it will be too late.
He'll introduce you to your fate,
on a much too early date.

The scary part about this story,
is that it is completely true.
Everything I have told you,
Happens.


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Re: Let me tell you a story.. (Poem) - September 9th 2012, 05:48 PM

I really love how you wrote this! I like how you personified the eating disorder as "Ed" and just how you described it. Wonderful job!


Do you ever get a little bit tired of life
Like you're not really happy but you don't wanna die
Like you're hanging by a thread but you gotta survive
'Cause you gotta survive
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Re: Let me tell you a story.. (Poem) - September 9th 2012, 06:15 PM

Thanks so much <3 Yeah, I was going to do "Ana" but I didn't want to narrow it down.

It was kind of weird, because I'm mentally dating Ed Sheeran (singer) so I kept thinking about him


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Re: Let me tell you a story.. (Poem) - September 9th 2012, 10:11 PM

I really like this poem, it's a great personification of an eating disorder because they really are scary like that. I especially like the final line, that one word "happens". It stands out because it doesn't rhyme and it really shocks you, which is also what EDs do. You write really well!




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