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Go on and tell me goodbye
Like there’s nothing left to hide
Let the rain crawl back inside
Scream on the top of your voice
Give in to yourself on the final choice

I know you’ve been movin’ on
But I’ve noticed you still can’ get rid of what is gone
I’ll say I’m sorry for the last time
But just think this year starts a whole new life

You take a few steps backward
Leading you to nowhere
Can’t we just both grow up and get out of here
I know you’re missing something
Girl that’s why we’re losing everything

Can’t make a tear strip right down your face
Because I’ve forgiven myself for the mistakes that I made
And I wouldn’t change a thing
‘Cause here I am still living today

So go on and tell me that you’ve changed your mind
Like there’s a secret that you have left behind
Let rain fall down on your world tonight

We can make this work
It’ll be alright

I’ll let the sun shine brighter if you take my hand
Because you were the first person I could call a friend
I’d take these chains
And break them so there’s no more pain

Yeah I know life could’ve been so much better
If I didn’t see what happened and make you surrender

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I really like this, but I love everything you write. :D The first stanza is my favourite. Good job!

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Aw thanks a bunch!!!!:D

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This is really good, I love your poems :D Keep up the good work.

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thank you so much!!!!

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As always, I love seeing your work. Wonderfully written as usual, keep up the great work! :)

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I'm quite impressed with this. I really like this part:

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I’ll let the sun shine brighter if you take my hand
Because you were the first person I could call a friend
I’d take these chains
And break them so there’s no more pain

You seem like a great writer. I'm eager to read more :)

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Aw thank you so very much!!!!! :)

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Originally Posted by Dez (Post 942428)

I really like this, but I love everything you write. :D The first stanza is my favourite. Good job!

exactly. took the words right out of my keyboard :bleh: :hug:

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lol, thank you soo much! :hug:

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Great poem, Rachel! And I agree with everyone else :D

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Thanks, that really means a lot! :hug: