The Rose And the Lily (Poem)
 

Hey guys, here's a sonnet I just finished writing about 10 minutes ago at work. The pattern is ABAA, obviously. And for anyone who doesn't know, a sonnet is a poem with 3 quatrains, and a couplet. I appreciate criticism, so criticize away please.

I walked along a country road
With a wind that kissed my face;
And there in place stood a lovely rose
Whose form looked like a model's pose.
This rose's beauty caught my stare;
I smiled and she smiled back,
Then crossed the plain to over where
She stood with flowing crimson hair.
She looked at me with sorry eyes
And said we'd never be,
So I took her hands and with a sigh
I kissed her vines and said goodbye.
It's all my fault, I was being silly,
A rose would never love a lily.

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this is absolutely beautiful <3 i truly deeply in every way love how you wrote this. keep writing!

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thats aweosme Ryan :D so pretty :hug:

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Ryan,
I really like how you captured the emotion while at the same time painting a picture for us.
Thank you for sharing such a great sonnet,
and please keep writing. :)
~paula

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This is really good and beautiful! :)