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Houseman June 19th 2012 01:23 PM
The City's Eyes (Poem)
 
The city's eyes are blurred tonight
Twixt rain and tears trapped in my sight.
I know not why the city cries
And shares with me her frigid sighs.
Perhaps like me she squalls in pain,
In search of what she can't explain,
And finds a refuge in her tears
Held back in pain for all the years
When every fight, and every crime,
Built up inside her every time.

Agony June 19th 2012 05:17 PM
Re: The City's Eyes (Poem)
 
I like how you compared yourself to the city, that was good. It was short but got the point across, good work! :) continue writing

Celaena-Sardothian June 19th 2012 06:45 PM
Re: The City's Eyes (Poem)
 
That is really good! I love it :D

Le Papillon June 24th 2012 02:27 AM
Re: The City's Eyes (Poem)
 
like Ash said, i liked the comparison. i also like the personification of the city, which again ties to yourself. and your word choice. very nice :)

¯|_(ツ)_|¯ June 24th 2012 05:06 AM
Re: The City's Eyes (Poem)
 
Wow, this one is really great! I agree with what everyone is saying fully.

Oldaccount. June 26th 2012 08:44 AM
Re: The City's Eyes (Poem)
 
I also really like the comparison you have used. It's a great poem!

DeletedAccount69 June 26th 2012 03:07 PM
Re: The City's Eyes (Poem)
 
I thought this was very beautifully written. :)


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