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Houseman

June 18th 2012 02:31 PM

Portrait (short poem)

The "foe" here is that thing that brought us all to teenhelp.

Twice today my foe retreated,
And each time death was nigh.
He walked away... ashamed, defeated;
But lo! My foe was I!

¯|_(ツ)_|¯

June 22nd 2012 02:35 AM

Re: Portrait (short poem)

I really like this, you wrote it well, I like the format you used here.

Twinge

June 24th 2012 12:14 AM

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unique unusual form of writing, i must say. takes so much skill too. :)

Le Papillon

June 24th 2012 02:22 AM

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short, sweet, and to the point. i liked the words you used too. nice :)

Oldaccount.

June 26th 2012 08:33 AM

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I really like the way you have formatted and the this poem, Ryan. It's great!

DeletedAccount69

June 26th 2012 03:10 PM

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I really liked this "But 'lo! my foe was I!" I think once we realize that the only thing that can keep us down is ourselves we are one step closer to getting to a better place. I hope you will continue sharing your work with us! :)

Houseman

June 28th 2012 05:23 AM

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Thank you for all the lovely comments everyone. And yeah Courageous, that's precisely what I was going for :)

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