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Portrait (short poem) - June 18th 2012, 03:31 PM
The "foe" here is that thing that brought us all to teenhelp.


Twice today my foe retreated,
And each time death was nigh.
He walked away... ashamed, defeated;
But lo! My foe was I!
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Re: Portrait (short poem) - June 22nd 2012, 03:35 AM
I really like this, you wrote it well, I like the format you used here.

Do you ever get a little bit tired of life
Like you're not really happy but you don't wanna die
Like you're hanging by a thread but you gotta survive
'Cause you gotta survive
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Re: Portrait (short poem) - June 24th 2012, 01:14 AM
unique unusual form of writing, i must say. takes so much skill too.

I moved back while
my head was turned.

Upside down
closer to the end.

Afraid of the dark
within future times.

I'm drowning there,
my final chase.
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Re: Portrait (short poem) - June 24th 2012, 03:22 AM
short, sweet, and to the point. i liked the words you used too. nice

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Re: Portrait (short poem) - June 26th 2012, 09:33 AM
I really like the way you have formatted and the this poem, Ryan. It's great!
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Re: Portrait (short poem) - June 26th 2012, 04:10 PM
I really liked this "But 'lo! my foe was I!" I think once we realize that the only thing that can keep us down is ourselves we are one step closer to getting to a better place. I hope you will continue sharing your work with us!
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Re: Portrait (short poem) - June 28th 2012, 06:23 AM
Thank you for all the lovely comments everyone. And yeah Courageous, that's precisely what I was going for

"My heart is warm with friends I make,
And better friends I'll not be knowing;
Yet there isn't a train I wouldn't take,
No matter where it's going."

- Edna St. Vincent Millay
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