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(Highly triggering, specifically on suicide, depression and SH) Help. (A Poem)

Critique is welcome, just keep it constructive :) I wrote this a few minutes ago. Don't worry about me, it doesn't express how I'm feeling. It's about a girl who committed suicide and regretted it at the last minute.

This does not at all promote or support SH or suicide. Please get help if you are in a situation involving such.

"Help."

An echoing silence bouncing through the halls
Whispering tears through midnight's call
We found her lying in her "beautiful" silent
The crimson trickles- hush now, be quiet
Her lips stirring words spoken too late
An ominous SOS cry trying to be made
Choked out too silent, much too hushed
Losing our minds inside the sight's rush.
She finally shudders,
She finally sighs,
Said the word before she closed her eyes,
"Help."

Re: (Highly triggering, specifically on suicide, depression and SH) Help. (A Poem)

This is amazing, you used a lot of imagery and emotion in this and it created a powerful image.

Re: (Highly triggering, specifically on suicide, depression and SH) Help. (A Poem)

one word for you: AMAHZING :) seriously you had me tranced by line 1. beautiful, so emotional, really its wonderful <3

Re: (Highly triggering, specifically on suicide, depression and SH) Help. (A Poem)

This is really good. I agree with Dez and Tay. Keep writing! :)