The Rescue (not at it's best yet, and needs a lot of work, but as a first draft it isn't bad :))

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Hey guys, so, I decided to write a series called "The Crime Slasherz", it's about these four teenagers, like you and me, going through life, they attend a boarding school and when they hit puberty, weird things start happening.
Things like, not being injured when being punched in a jaw, or entering somebody's mind and seeing their memories (also sitting around somewhere and just hearing thoughts), things moving without touching them, and visions.
They think they're going crazy until a woman comes and tells them what happened when they were born.
I hope you guys like the Prologue keep in mind I know it has room for improvement and I might have gotten some of the punctuation incorrect and I'll fix these up or have my editor do so when I send it to her ( I wrote this from four different perspectives throughout and made sure it is clear enough to recognise whom is speaking

Enjoy:


Prologue







Kristy jumped as loud explosions surrounded her, knocking her off her feet as scream after scream tore at her throat. The blaze around her burned her skin, she could hear Deuce shouting her name but with the loud crackle of flames and the swirling smoke, she couldn’t discern where the faint voice was.

Deuce tried leaping through the flames but a support beam fell, sending sparks flying at him. He lifted his arm to protect his eyes as he tried to find a way through.
“Kristy!” he shouted again, hearing a weak cough but not able to find a gap in the flames. He rolled up his sleeves, taking a step back as he made a swift hand movement at the support, which had fallen, in his way.

Jess darted by Deuce, not even seeing him, the smoke had engulfed all of them. The flames licked at Jess’s skin but she couldn’t feel any pain, the flames left her unharmed. She ran towards the coughing, but the noise of the fire and the smoke had knocked out her sense of direction.
It was like trying to find a needle in a haystack.
Or in this case, a human amongst the fire.
Jess didn’t give up, she plowed on.

Nathan hopped along, the crutches left behind, the metal had heat up to unbearable levels.
“Deuce! Kristy! Jess!” He screamed. His throat was burning as he coughed out the smoke he’d inhaled. He tripped and lay on the ground for a few seconds, allowing almost pure, clean air into his lungs. He managed to pull himself across the ground, using his arms and his good foot, he shoved and pulled himself along, somehow finding the door.

Kristy felt light-headed, her coughs weaker as she lay on the ground, attempting to get back to her feet but the smoke had completely filled her lungs, her throat had closed up, locking the smoke inside. She knew she was dying.
A bright light exploded across her vision.

Deuce plunged through the flames, the support beam was no longer blocking his path. He sprinted through, his eyes watering as he searched for Kristy.
“Kristy? Where are you? Yell if you can hear me!” Deuce shouted, nearly coughing out the words. He ran into somebody. He turned to see Jess, his vision blurred.
“Get out of here! I’ll find her,” Jess shouted in his ear. He shook his head.
“No, what about you?” Deuce asked.
“Ah, hello? You do know who I am, right?” Jess asked. Deuce felt her hands shove him towards the light and he stumbled towards it, hoping Jess would find Kristy in time. He tripped over a body in his way. Nathan cried out in pain. Deuce landed awkwardly, hearing a crack as his shoulder popped out of the socket. Deuce lifted himself back up, using his good arm as a support, and then yanked Nathan up. Tears made tracks down the soot on both of their faces. Deuce and Nathan linked arms and helped each. Once outside, they both doubled over, gagging on the smoke and coughing violently.

Jess, still screaming for Kristy, could feel her defences growing weak, the smoke was searing her lungs and burning her eyes but she pressed on. Although blinded by smoke, she somehow found Kristy. Unfortunately, Kristy was unconscious and a dead weight.
“Deuce!” Jess screamed.

Deuce heard the scream, pushed himself back up and Nathan exchanged a worried glance with him.
“Go” Nathan pushed him back towards the burning building. Deuce began to sprint as the building tumbled in on itself.
“Jess! Kristy!”

Jess threw her body onto Kristy’s as she heard loud snapping sounds coming from around her. The walls collapsed, the roof landed around them, shattering on her back. Jess could feel sticky blood beneath her hand and gasped.
“Kristy!”

Thanks for reading

Jay.

[Validity]

I apologise, my computer fucked up when posting this I don't know why some words are larger than others, it was not my intention. I hope it still reads well!

Jay.

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You're an awesome writer! I could imagine this well. You use such great description, I totally want to read more.

[Validity]

I said my laptop fucked up... how the fuck did it get in the depression and suicide forum? :facepalm: grrr, somebody please move this to the correct forum!

Thanks Dez I'm glad you liked it!

Jay.

[~Divergent~]

Argh, THE SUSPENSE!
I want more

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Haha I'm glad it was suspenceful! I was trying to hard to make it a must-read, so people would be reeled in The next chapter goes back to the beginning, when things start happening

Jay.